The Secret of the Senses

Cliffrose near Walnut Canyon National Monument

When I’ve spoken to other writers about making their work more sensual, a few have jumped to conclusions, thinking I’m suggesting they change their manuscript from a memoir or mystery into a romance novel. What I mean is this: Whether you’re writing a romance novel or a travel story, involve the five senses in your work.

I learned this simple technique at the very first writing workshop I attended, about 25 years ago. At the time, I’d published poetry and corporate materials, and I'd finished a romantic suspense manuscript that had just been politely turned down by Harlequin. The workshop leader, Richard Jewell, was published across a multitude of genres and markets, and his advice was universal and easy to implement. To date, it remains the most valuable workshop I’ve ever taken.

Some of us respond well to inspiration, some to nagging. I respond to practicalities and tools, and Jewell matter-of-factly shared several over the course of a couple evenings. Incorporating his suggestions, I revised my manuscript and sent it to the next publisher on my list. It sold.

Are you ready for the secret?

Ground your words in the reality of taste, touch, sound, smell, and sight, and they will come alive. Incorporating the senses in your writing is a bit like cooking, however. If you add too many seasonings, or too much of one spice, the dish will be unpalatable. Instead, sprinkle in the senses in proportion to how we use them.

Because most of us are visually oriented, sight—describing how things look—will be the dominant flavor. Very likely, you’ve incorporated the visual sense intuitively, without having to think about it. You may have even overdone it—too much description and not enough dialogue, for example. The danger of engaging so much with the virtual world is that we rely more and more on the sense of sight. Without including the other four senses, our writing can become as flat as our screens. 

Though sounds may be harder to spot in your writing (just as we often don’t notice the sounds around us once we’ve become habituated to them), we rely heavily on our sense of hearing. Does your fictional heroine respond to a footstep in the dark? Does your travel story include the sound of the wind or the pulsing beat from a nightclub? Include a sound on each page of your story.

The sense of touch--the itch of wool against skin, the slick coolness of a glass of ice tea--should pop up every couple pages. Smell and taste are more challenging to incorporate, especially if you’re writing nonfiction, but a dash of these every few pages will add immediacy to your work: the bitterness of stale coffee, the heady vanilla-like scent of a blooming cliffrose.

When you engage all five of the reader’s senses, you’ve opened a doorway into your world—the one you’ve created on the page (or screen)—and the reader becomes an active participant. 

Try it. I know it sounds simple, but what have you got to lose?